Sunday, November 21, 2010

Script Test: A Good Clown


Hi all,

I just wrote this script called, A Good Clown.

Please take a look and let me know what you think. I'll handle the grammar pieces afterwards.

Oh, it's considered scary.
A Good Clown

7 comments:

Cubby said...

My regular rate is $500/hour, but I'll give you a break because I like you.

Cubby said...

Oh My God!!!! That was unexpected!! I loved it!

Ken Riches said...

Interesting.

My biggest concern is why was there a clown in the elevator? I think I would make it a costume party, or based at Circus Circus.

Wonder Man said...

I just changed it to explain why the clown was there. Thanks for the fb, Ken

WilsonW said...

Hey Vic! Very interesting. Just one thing. Bobo's gloves are described as being white when he holds the door open, but then are described as being red in the full description immediately following.

Is this a complete story or an intro to something larger?

Wonder Man said...

it could be more, but it's also for my grad school application

WilsonW said...

It definitely feels like the intro to something considerably larger, meaning it left me wanting to know MORE!! Which is hard to do these days! Can't wait to see more of your writing!

Not sure if you'd be interested but a friend of mine is entering this movie script concept. Why not give em some REAL competition?

http://studios.amazon.com/contests

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